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Do you honestly think, that you will change my thinking?
Do you honestly believe you can keep belittling me
And treat me like your slave like you always did?
Let's face it you only talked to me when you wanted something
You can deny it as much as you want to, the fact is you still
did.
After a while you told me yourself right
Did you think that I will just sit here take it forever
Like a DOLL.
That girl you knew is history.
I will admit I wanted to give you the world
That is no longer the case
But this fake respect, the fake mask
Is now more easy to spot than ever before
I know am showing you the real me.
It's Your turn.
Do you honestly believe you can keep belittling me
And treat me like your slave like you always did?
Let's face it you only talked to me when you wanted something
You can deny it as much as you want to, the fact is you still
did.
After a while you told me yourself right
Did you think that I will just sit here take it forever
Like a DOLL.
That girl you knew is history.
I will admit I wanted to give you the world
That is no longer the case
But this fake respect, the fake mask
Is now more easy to spot than ever before
I know am showing you the real me.
It's Your turn.
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Surreal Reality
Surreal Reality:
The tides that bind a fallen city,
Swirls of vision, animosity...
Lost beneath a silvered glass,
Watch and wait as hours pass.
You find yourself, now surreal,
Surrounded by clocks with a ticking squeal.
You walk to the kitchen, a hand you find,
A platter in which to place your mind.
The microwave dings, the toaster rings,
From the oven you pull, intestinal strings.
You stab with the knife, it ends in your head,
Place your mind into a toasted bread...
You walk to the car, you breathe in deep,
You look into your pocket; the bottle you keep.
You take a long swig, it's a magical drive,
Your soul falls asleep while
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My Eternal Curse
My Eternal Curse:
Since the time I was awakened,
From the dawn I lived and breathed.
I have always walked alone,
For I carry a dark disease.
No matter where I go,
No matter where I'm born.
Always it will reveal itself,
Always I am torn.
The moon will shine from cloudless heavens,
And soon the change will take it's place.
My fangs will grow and fur will sprout,
It is my deep and dark disgrace...
Silverback, they called me,
Bane of men and beast alike.
Knights and templar, each and all,
Sought to have me on a pike.
I've killed so many countless men,
They are faceless in my waking dreams.
Bones shall litter the depths of my la
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Self Righteous Suicide
Self Righteous Suicide:
We're sleeping,
In a cold world,
That has long denied the light.
We isolate,
Each other,
As we walk alone at night.
We plot,
Unholy vengeance,
As we dream of endless death,
We hate,
Our reflections,
As we choke away our breath.
We sleep,
And suffer,
Tormented by our dreams.
Alone,
And frightened,
None shall hear our screams.
So sick,
So vengeful,
A taste that is sickly sweet...
Let me end,
This life,
For hope I shall not meet...
"Why should we alone cry, when angels deserve to die?"
-Chen Yuan Wen, 24th February 2012
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Hey guys, how are you all? No honestly how are you? XD
I hope you like my poem, any comments are welcome.
Feedback, critiques, and spelling corrections the whole
sha-bang is welcome. XD
Anyone have the feeling where someone is using you? That someone was being so fake to you just so they could get something and leave? Well in this peice i wanted to describe that.
Enjoy my anger poem. lol (happier one on the way)
I hope you like my poem, any comments are welcome.
Feedback, critiques, and spelling corrections the whole
sha-bang is welcome. XD
Anyone have the feeling where someone is using you? That someone was being so fake to you just so they could get something and leave? Well in this peice i wanted to describe that.
Enjoy my anger poem. lol (happier one on the way)
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Overall Vision
Originality Technique ImpactThis free verse is very powerful to me. (I have personally been in situations like this, so it is like you're putting my feelings in writing.)
The most important part of this poem, to me, is the inclusion of the questions. They make the reader really thing about what you are saying and ponder about if they have ever acted like this. I find it interesting that you liken your "old self" to a doll. Dolls and puppets are common themes when it comes to writings on this kind of subject. I'm not saying that this is a lack of originality; on the contrary, it suits the ideas in the poem quite well. It would be cool if the poem were able to be tweaked a bit to rhyme, but obviously, that isn't necessary and is just a subjective preference some people have. Overall, Great Job! *highfive* ;D