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Here I am talking to you

This smiling person who has it way to bad for you
The only way at times I feel whole is near you
The only person I look forward to seeing is you
The one that I want to watch grow is you
The one I feel is deserving of everything is you

Every sentence I seem to say ends with you

So naturally it would be good to say:

I Love You. <3






Haruhi- 2/6-12
This is a submission for the #Heart-of-Poetry contest.

Don't really know if it is any good. But Hopefully people can understand this.

Enjoy all. ^^




My first contest.... hee
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
reminds me of my love :) well written
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, I am glad you did. ^^
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SuperGirlSwag Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012  Student Writer
xD
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Dawnfad Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
short and sweet :)
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Student Writer
hee thank you.

^^
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Dawnfad Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome ^^
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Student Writer
X3 heee
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very sweet :)
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:iconsaigen-naku:
Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
Daww thank you. so much. X3
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. Keep writing ^_^
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:iconsaigen-naku:
Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
I will for sure. Thankies. X3
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springlemons Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I wrote a similar poem with a similar theme.
"Six hours ahead means you're/Constantly in my future"
love is wonderful, isn't it?
<3
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
That is awesome. YOu should link it to mehs.
It is indeed. ^^

Thank you.
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springlemons Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
[link]

^^
You're very welcome!
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:iconsaigen-naku:
Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
I shall check it out. XD

^^
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klevry1 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awwwww how cute! ^^
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
*giggles* Thank you. Thank you for commenting. ^^ and faving.
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animegrl7979 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
Awws its simplistic and too the point and very symbolic love it good luck on the contest
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much. My goal was just to tell it how it is in the poem.. but lets hope it works. XD
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animegrl7979 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
your very welcome
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
^^
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
it's amazing!
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much Zoey. Glad you liked it. XD
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LugiaLuvr13 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012
you're welcome ^^
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
^^
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X24nekosan Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! :)
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you I am so glad you did.
Please come again.

^____^
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ciscobuddy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
Very nice!!
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank chu. I am glad you liked i. ^__^
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ciscobuddy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012
You are welcome.
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
^3^
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poisonous-ink Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
It's amazing Miss Haruhi ~ ^_^ keep up the good work.
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you Levi-sama.

I am so happy you liked it, I will try.
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poisonous-ink Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
どう致しまして。 ;P
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
私たちは、このような詳細は頻繁に話すべきである。 XD
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poisonous-ink Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
We are such details should speak frequently?
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
Up to you.
Think it is fun.
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poisonous-ink Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
ah
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
:?
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Ani-casma Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
OMG! This is amazing QwQ Its simple but striking! I think its really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really really awesome <3


"Every sentence I seem to say ends with you

So naturally it would be good to say:

I Love You. <3"

I loved that bit the most, because it is true and it is soo adorable! >////< Kyan! Really!

You really showed that "you" was the important word, and that made it really effective/striking.

It really is cute though >///<
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Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
.///////////. Wow...thank you so much

i am so so so so so happy that you liked it. x3
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Ani-casma Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I LOVED IT >w<
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:iconsaigen-naku:
Saigen-naku Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012  Student Writer
Dawwww...thank you sooooo much Ani!! Weeeeeeeeeeeee
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Ani-casma Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
XDDD
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